大学英语作文:查尔斯先生和成功的钢市学校 Mr. Charles and the successful Steel City School

In this argument, the arguer concludes that the Saluda school should hire Mr.Schade to plan and direct the general music education programs for entire Saluds school system. To support this conclusion, the arguer point out that during the time Mr. Charles Schade was the music director at Steel City High School, the school band from Steel City High has won three regional band competitions. In addition, the argue reasons that the quality of the music rehearsal facilities and musical instrments at Steel City High has improved markedly over the past five years. However, this argument suffers several critical fallacies. First, the argument is based on a false analogy. Although Mr. Charles Schade has brought the Streel City High School much glory, it dosent mean he will bring the same effective execution to Saluda school and make it success too. Because the places of these two schools located are different, it is entirely possible that the music atmosphere in Steel City is better than that in the town of Saluda; even music has become part of the Streel City peoples life. Moreover, is the fact past representative enough to show that Mr. Charles Schade will continue be keen on that kind of music competition. So the author should take both place and time into account before making the final conclusion. Second, the arguer commits a fallacy of hasty generalization. The argument lacks more specific information about how much effort Mr. Charles Schade has offered during the reginal band competitions and what he has done to the whole band. In another word the author fails to establish the relationship between Mr.Schade and the outstanding success of the Steel City High School band. So it cannot convince us that Mr. Charle contributes good mark of music band. Another flaw that weakens the logic of the argument is that the arguer didnt take other reasons into account. The author fails to rule out the fact that winning in the regional competitions three times cannot fully conclude the performance of this band is outstanding too. Further more, we can get no imformation of the achievement of the school of town of Saluda, maybe it have taken part in some larger scope competition and more successful than that of Steel City High School. Before I come to my concludion, it is necessary to point out another flaw in the argument. The quality of the music rehearsal facilities and musical instruments at Steel City High has improved markedly over the past five years cannot indicate clear relationship associated with Mr. Charles. In conclusion, the arguer fails to establish a causal relationship between Mr Charles and the success of Steel City School. Without further analysis, to hire Mr. Schade to plan and direct the general music education programs for the entire Saluda school system is still in boubt.

在这场争论中，论述者得出结论，Saluda学校应该雇佣Mr.Schade计划和指挥整个saluds学校系统的教育项目。为了支持这一结论，作者指出，在查尔斯先生不幸在钢市当高中音乐总监，乐队从钢市高赢得了三个地区乐队比赛。此外，该争吵的原因，音乐排练设备和音乐乐器质量的钢铁城市高中在过去的五年中有明显改善。然而，这个论点有几个关键的谬误。首先，这个论点是基于一个错误的类比。虽然查尔斯先生不幸带来的钢市高中多的荣耀，这并不意味着他会带来相同的有效执行，并使其成功Saluda学校。因为这两所学校坐落的地方是不同的，这是完全可能的，在钢市的音乐氛围优于Saluda镇；即使音乐已经成为人们生活的一部分的钢市。此外，事实是过去的代表，足以表明查尔斯先生很会继续热衷于这种音乐比赛。因此，作者应该把时间和地点都考虑在作出最终结论。其次，论述者犯了谬误的轻率概括的说法缺乏更具体的信息多少的努力查，尔斯先生不幸在地区乐队比赛提供什么他做了整个乐队。在另一个词作者未建立Mr.Schade和钢市高中乐队的杰出的成功之间的关系。所以它不能说服我们，查理先生有好音乐带标记。另一个缺陷，削弱论证的逻辑是，作者没有考虑其他原因。作者并没有排除事实赢得区域比赛三次不能完全断定这个乐队的表现突出。此外，我们可以得到的信息对城镇学校的成绩也许已经在Saluda，较大范围的竞争和更成功的部分比钢市高中。在我来之前我的结论，需要指出的是在争论中的另一个缺陷。的音乐排练设备和乐器质量的钢铁城市高中在过去的五年里已经不能明显改善显示明确的关系与查尔斯先生有关的。在结论中，作者没有建立因果关系，查尔斯先生和成功的钢市学校。没有进一步的分析，雇佣Mr.Schade计划整个直接S学校的教育项目体系仍在怀疑。